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the table below shows consumer's average annual expenditures on banana and coffee in 5 countries from 1999 to 2004

the table below shows consumer's average annual expenditures on banana and coffee in 5 countries from 1999 to 2004
The table below illustrates the amount of money spent on coffee and bananas in 5 different countries over the
period
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 of 5 years starting from 1999.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden witnessed an upward trend during most of the
period
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. It is
also
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 notable,
the
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that the
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 highest figure and the most significant go uphill can be recorded in the UK. In 1999, the sale of coffee and bananas started at 1,5
million
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of
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euros
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 before hitting a peak of 20
million
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euros
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at the end
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 of the
period
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, a significant increase compared to the starting point.
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, between 1999 to 2004, Switzerland witnessed
two- fold
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two-fold
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 growth of 6
million
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euros
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 from the starting point of 3
million
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euros
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 during the same
period
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. The other three countries witnessed
the
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a
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 higher rate of spending. Denmark, Belgium and Sweden showed an equal number of coffee and bananas
expense
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expenses
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 at under 2
million
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 in 1999, but
then
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 the figure
climbled
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climbed
climb led
 slowly to 2
million
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, 1.7
million
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 and 1
million
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, respectively
at the end
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 of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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