Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Point to the latest research crimes
which
are harsh Correct pronoun usage
apply
is
increasing Correct subject-verb agreement
are
between
teenagers who are under 18. A number of psychologists think Change preposition
among
that is
the parents
fault or even Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
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the techers
techers
because of the Correct your spelling
teachers
behavor
they have with them. I strongly disagree with Correct your spelling
behaviour
this
statement and that is
for the sence
of parents have with their Correct your spelling
sense
childreen
and the contract which Correct your spelling
children
techears
sign when they being a teacher.
Families like their Correct your spelling
teachers
childreen
and Correct your spelling
children
that
is
can not be correct they behave Unnecessary verb
apply
unkind
with their babies. When a man and Change the adjective
unkindly
women
become a father and mother some emotion and feal have been made Fix the agreement mistake
woman
on
their Change preposition
in
heart
like love and Fix the agreement mistake
hearts
this
fealing
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feeling
forced
them to be Wrong verb form
forces
kind
. for example
, when a child say
to his or her mother I like being Change the verb form
says
doctor
the feeling that Add an article
a doctor
mother
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the mother
have
is a Change the verb form
has
kind
of motivation because of the love she has. So this
idea can not be turue
the Correct your spelling
true
behave
of parents Replace the word
behaviour
to
their Change preposition
towards
childreen
is a deal of doing crime.
Teachers sign some contracts before they start Correct your spelling
children
activity
as a teacher Correct article usage
an activity
that is
being kind
and some limitaions
which are related to behaving with Correct your spelling
limitations
childreen
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children
such
as not screming
, Correct your spelling
screaming
do
not shouting, being Unnecessary verb
apply
kind
and recpective
. Correct your spelling
respective
receptive
This
limitation have
made because of Wrong verb form
has been
childreen
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children
right
in Fix the agreement mistake
rights
a
society and everything is Remove the article
apply
controling
around the world nowadays. Correct your spelling
controlled
This
statemant
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statement
ca not
be right too because of the details that Correct your spelling
cannot
was
mentioned.
Change the verb form
were
Finally
, these two groups never want to destor
the future of Correct your spelling
destroy
childreens
life because of the Correct your spelling
children
sence
and Correct your spelling
sense
limitation
that they have. I Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
recomend
that Correct your spelling
recommend
attentions
of society have to focus on the other things that make Correct article usage
the attentions
sence
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sense
not
the things that are not Add the comma(s)
, not
relible
.Correct your spelling
reliable
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coherence cohesion
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