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The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
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The given graph illustrates the
population
 of three turtle species in India between 1980 to 2012. Obviously, the significant rise
Olive
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Ridely
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Ridley
Turtles
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 seen for
an
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almost three decades. A fluctuation trend is depicted for the mean
population
 of all species.
While
,
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 its maximum level is 115
at
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 the year
of
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1987, the minimum is seen
just
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 near 100
at
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 the year 2003.
However
, the Green Turtle
similarly
 has a
fluctute
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fluctuate
 trend, which
its
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ranged
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 between 90 to 110 in
this
 period of time. A significant rise is observed for Olive Ridley
Turtles
, which
is
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started from 100 to almost 130.
In addition
, it has the highest
population
 among the other types,
which
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its
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 maximum level is
near
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to
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140,
although
 Leatherback
Turtles
has
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 the
least
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lowest
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population
. The trend depicts the
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drastically
drastic
decreased
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 in Leatherback
Turtles
inhabitatns
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inhabitants
 in the given country. Not only
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 the
population
 decreased for three decades, but
also
 the number
is
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 seen
half
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at
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last
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the last
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 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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