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Revenue sources and expenditures of a USA Charity in one year,2016

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The chart below gives information about the quantity of expenditure and income which
kids charity
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 gained in the USA during the annual turnover in 2016. Looking at an
overall
 structure it is
readyly
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readily
apparant
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apparent
 that the highest revenue
sources
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source
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is
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 donated food and the most preferred
expenditures
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 is program services.
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 the lowest income source is government grants when the least preferred expenses
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 management and general. Looking at the pie chart in more detail it is clearly seen that the second most common revenue source is community contributions
whereas
 in expenses the second proportion is fundraising.
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 the
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 part of
incomes
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income
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 namely program revenue indicated
in
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 2.2
percent
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per cent
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. Comparing
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total amount among both pie charts it is apparent that
total
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 annual turnover income slightly exceeds the expenses in 2016.
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Work on the conclusion to summarize the main points effectively. An effective conclusion enhances coherence and cohesion.
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Provide more specific examples and data from the pie chart to enhance the strength of your arguments and support your main points.
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The essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the main sources of revenue and expenditure of the charity.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure is logical and it is easy to follow the argument progression.

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