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Task 1 – Take a look at the chart below and perform the task as outlined: This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 – Take a look at the chart below and perform the task as outlined: This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph reveals the recycling
rate
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 for materials
such
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 as
paper
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 and
cardboard
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,
glass
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containers
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,
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aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
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 and
plastics
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, from 1982 to 2010.
Overall
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, the percentages show that
paper
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,
cardboard
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 and
glass
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containers
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 had a higher recycling
rate
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,
whereas
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aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
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 and
plastics
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 were recycled less.
To begin
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,
paper
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,
cardboard
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 and
glass
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containers
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 recorded an increase in recycling rates.
Paper
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 and
cardboard
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 began at a 65% recycling
rate
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 in 1982, and peaked
to
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 80% in 1994.
Following
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this
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, it slowly fell to 70% by 2010. For
glass
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containers
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, the
rate
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 started at 50% in 1982
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 and gradually declined to a
rate
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 of 40% in 1990.
After
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this
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, the recycling
rate
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 steadily increased to 60% by the end of the period.
By contrast
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,
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aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
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 and
plastics
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 demonstrated lower recycling rates.
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Aluminum
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Aluminium
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cans
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 stood at 5% in 1986
,
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 and saw a consistent increase in rates to 40% by 2010. For
plastics
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,
this
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 number began lower at 2% in 1990
,
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 and gradually increased up to 8% by the end of the period.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, paper, cardboard, glass, containers, aluminum, cans, plastics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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