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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The illustration shows the town of Garrlsdon that two new supermarkets are planned to be constructed in two different areas of town.
Overall
, it can be seen that supermarkets are planned to be introduced in two different places, including the countryside and the town centre. Looking at the details, it appears that the first
supermarket
 is shown by “S1” and is planned to be added to the countryside on the west side of Garrlsdo n, which is 12 km far from Hindon and has 10,000 population.
This
supermarket
 is above the railway and the main road is on the left side of it. Another
supermarket
, which is shown by “S2” on the map is located in the centre of Garrlsdon, where there is no traffic zone.
This
 place is below the railway and industries are all around it. The second
supermarket
 is 16 km to Bransdon with 15,000 people and 25 km to Cransdon with 29,000 population
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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