In some countries,fast food restaurant and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In some countries, fast

food

restaurants and supermarkets offer Money to the

school

for the

promotion

of their product.In my

opinion

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opinion,

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  it is a negative development.

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essay

discuss

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discusses

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negative development in detail

along with

relevant

conclusion

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conclusions

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. On the one hand, the

school

has a crucial role

to provide

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in providing

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knowledge to the

children

. But some people

are

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significantly use

this

as a place to do

promotion

.Which will distract the students from

studies

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their studies

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,

they

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and they

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will concentrate on

promotion

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the promotion

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programme. through the

advertise

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advertising

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they share inappropriate content

to

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with

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the

children

.

For example

,Supermarkets sell their products

such

as fairness cream,

hair

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and hair

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oil through

promotion

. By watching

these

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this promotion

these promotions

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promotion

,Small

children

start to use the products which resulting health issues like kidney disease.

Moreover

, most products are not tested clinically.

Beside

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,The

childrens

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children

children's

become addicted

in

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to

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junk

food

, because

this

is a delicious than home

food

. Consuming junk

food

regularly can cause cancer.

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,a survey stated that,

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20

percentage

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per cent

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of

children

on

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are on

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cancer treatment

due to

over consumption

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overconsumption

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of junk

food

.

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which

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this

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  leads to anxiety and  lack of concentration. through the

promotion

,nowadays

school

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schools

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have become a part of these problems. In conclusion, the

school

should

promote

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encourage

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children

to study well, if they opt

school

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for school

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as

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apply

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to make money through

the

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apply

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promotion

,Which will negatively affect each of the students in the

school

,

this

will put the

children

to big consequences.So

iam

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I am

not supporting the statement .