In some countries,fast food restaurant and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In some countries, fast
food
restaurants and supermarkets offer Money to the school
for the promotion
of their product.In my opinion
it is a negative development. Add a comma
opinion,
This
essay discuss
negative development in detail Change the verb form
discusses
along with
relevant conclusion
.
On the one hand, the Fix the agreement mistake
conclusions
school
has a crucial role to provide
knowledge to the Change preposition
in providing
children
. But some people are
significantly use Unnecessary verb
apply
this
as a place to do promotion
.Which will distract the students from studies
, Correct pronoun usage
their studies
they
will concentrate on Correct word choice
and they
promotion
programme. through the Correct article usage
the promotion
advertise
they share inappropriate content Change the form of the verb
advertising
to
the Change preposition
with
children
.For example
,Supermarkets sell their products such
as fairness cream, hair
oil through Correct word choice
and hair
promotion
. By watching these
Change the determiner
this promotion
these promotions
promotion
,Small children
start to use the products which resulting health issues like kidney disease. Moreover
, most products are not tested clinically.
Beside
,The Replace the word
Besides
childrens
become addicted Correct your spelling
children
children's
in
junk Change preposition
to
food
, because this
is a delicious than home food
. Consuming junk food
regularly can cause cancer.For example
,a survey stated that,The
20 Correct article usage
apply
percentage
of Replace the word
per cent
children
on
cancer treatment Add a missing verb
are on
due to
over consumption
of junk Correct your spelling
overconsumption
food
. Further
which
leads to anxiety and lack of concentration. through the Correct pronoun usage
this
promotion
,nowadays school
have become a part of these problems.
In conclusion, the Fix the agreement mistake
schools
school
should promote
Verb problem
encourage
children
to study well, if they opt school
Change preposition
for school
as
to make money through Correct word choice
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
promotion
,Which will negatively affect each of the students in the school
, this
will put the children
to big consequences.So iam
not supporting the statement .Correct your spelling
I am
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