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Throughout history, people have dreamed to live in a perfect society while they haven't agreed how what the ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? What can people do to achieve an ideal society?

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 undeniably
people
 have dreamed of living in a perfect
society
while
 they have not agreed how what the ideal
society
 would be like . What do you believe is the most important element of a good
society
 in the modern world one of the most challenging issues in the field
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