The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The illustrated pie chart describes the main reasons
of
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phone
usage
among teenagers in
four
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year
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four-year
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period between 2016 to 2019 in an African country.
To begin
with, in 2016 social
network
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was leading
the
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phone
usage
at 50% reason
of
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phone
usage
, next to email at 25% and digital
camera
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cameras
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and
phone
call
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calls
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with th remaining in the remaining 25%. The trend shifted to
usage
in
phone
call
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calls
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in 2017 by 3%. In the next two
years
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email reduced to only 19% with
phone
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a phone
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call
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at
the
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only 5% next to it at the lowest in
phone
usage
,
on the other
hand
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a
consistant
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consistent
constant
rise is observed in social
network
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networks
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and
digitak
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digital
camera
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cameras
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reaching a peak at 56% and 20% in
phone
usage
in 2019.
Overall
, a trend shift is observed in the
teenager
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teenagers
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usage
of
phone
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phones
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, social
network
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and digital
camera
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cameras
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ended up being the biggest reason in
these
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this four year period
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four year
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period.
However
,
phone
calls are
is
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the least reason to use
phone
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the phone
a phone
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noticeable shift
  • communication preferences
  • considerably declined
  • functionalities
  • reflecting global trends
  • emerging trend
  • educational use of technology
  • diversification
  • traditional communication
  • digital forms of communication
  • instant messaging
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