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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who live in four certain
countries
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 in Asia living in
cities
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, over a 30-year period, starting from 1970 and with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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, it can be seen that all
countries
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 experienced an upward trend, witnessing Malaysia with the highest dramatic rise. What
also
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 stands out from the chart is that Malaysia recorded the greatest number of
people
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 who lived in
cities
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 for almost the entire period
except
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 the years 1970 and 1990 when
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 held the top spot. Among all these
countries
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, in first place was
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, with just over 30% of the population living in
cities
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, compared to the number of
people
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 living in
metropolis
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the metropolis
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 area in Malaysia by 2%.
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 was followed by Thailand and Indonesia, with respective figures being around 20% and 14%.
Thereafter
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, the rate of the population who chose
cities
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 to live
increased
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 rapidly to approximately 75% in 2020 and
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 to grow up to 80% in 2040.
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, a noticeable rise was observed in the share of
people
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 living in
cities
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 in Indonesia, growing dramatically by 46%. Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 followed a similar trend, but less pronounced, with its figure rising sharply by around 10% for the same data of 2 remaining
countries
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 and forecasted to hit a peak of around 50% and 53% in turn.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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