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In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles would be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate
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 means of transport should be automatic driving in the future.
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 there are abundant risky accidents that could take place;
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, I suppose the disadvantages may outweigh
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. Without a shadow of a doubt,
vehicles
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 that are promoted by artificial intelligence play
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such
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a paramount role in people's future lives.
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 explanation for
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 could be that automatic
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 can work round
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 clock, unlike humans, people can be exhausted,
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 and that makes them not paying attention to the road.
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, automated cars, buses or trucks can reduce the rate of demises from prospectively detrimental accidents resulting from
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 shortcomings.
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, in
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 day and age, there are abundant driverless
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 so I think it is just a matter of time.
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,
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 that are driven by robots are an indispensable part
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 the future
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 the redeeming feature of the driverless transport system is widely acknowledged, there still linger some potential risks to people's
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.
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, cyber-criminals can hack the transport system for their illegal purposes. To be more specific, those perpetrators can hack the police
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 which brings them big advantages to escape from jails.
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, even though robots can not run out of energy, they
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 have endangered errors
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 as not listening to humans and crashing into other
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 which lethally lead to unforeseeable drawbacks. In conclusion, whilst driverless
vehicles
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 as cars, trucks or buses may lead to several consequences, I agree that it may do more good than harm.

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task achievement
The writer attempts to present balanced arguments, showing awareness of both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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