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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Rohan, [16-06-2024 10:25 AM] The bar chart presents the data regarding households with internet access in all the countries [ Germany,
UK
,
Spain
 ].
Overall
, year by year;
accessor
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accessors
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 of the network increasing gradually. Majorly
Spain
 has
rise
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 around 40% in the period of thirteen years. In
year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2007, Germany
having
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 higher users as
compare
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compared
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 to
UK
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the UK
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 and
Spain
.
UK
 is suffering as a mid-user as per percentage growth and
Spain
 had a difference
around
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 30% users as
compare
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 to
highest
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the highest
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 user's data i.e, around 40%. By every two years household network users are increasing gradually. As per
chart
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the chart
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, highest developed
user
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users
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 from 2007 to 2019,
that is
Spain
while
,
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UK
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the UK
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 added
likely
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apply
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30%
people
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of people
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 and Germany added 25% mankind in it. Rohan, [16-06-2024 10:36 AM] In the end, All three countries showed an increase in the number of households with internet access over the thirteen years.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Household internet access
  • Percentage (%)
  • European countries
  • Twelve-year period
  • Technological advancement
  • Digital connectivity
  • Yearly/periodic growth
  • Significant increase
  • Government initiatives
  • Technological breakthroughs
  • Rapid growth
  • Policy changes
  • Infrastructure development
  • Economic factors
  • Plateaus
  • Saturation points
  • Societal impacts
  • Economic impacts
  • Remote work
  • Digital commerce
  • Future projections
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