Topic: The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?
The
damaging
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damage
of
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to
natural
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the natural
environment
effects
from Correct your spelling
affects
escalate
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escalating
production
of consumer Add an article
the production
product
. There are some causes Fix the agreement mistake
products
those
of Correct determiner usage
the
exploration
wood in the forest
and building industry
of mine in the areas
to support the economy of the country.
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wood
in the Change preposition
of wood
forest
ones of address in some countries because most people
do to get some opportunity
, Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
for example
illegal loging
and deforestation Correct your spelling
logging
are
happen in Unnecessary verb
apply
the
some Remove the article
apply
areas
. Therofore
, some Correct your spelling
Therefore
biodevirsity
will be extinct because Correct your spelling
biodiversity
of
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apply
people
are destroying Add an article
the forest
forest
. Fix the agreement mistake
forests
Besides
, building
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the building
industry
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is ones
ones
of Correct your spelling
one
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the problem
a problem
problem
right now. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
Although
the goverment encrease
the economy to Correct your spelling
government increased
built
some Wrong verb form
build
indutsry
, most of Correct your spelling
industries
biodiversity
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the biodiversity
are
extinct because of Correct subject-verb agreement
is
exploration
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the exploration
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of forest
forest
to change area Fix the agreement mistake
forests
industry
, for instance
, Antam And Freeport are big companies built in indonesia
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Indonesia
for
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to
supproting
the economy but the problem is there many extinct Correct your spelling
support
diversity
in the places. Replace the word
diverse
Consequently
, damaging
of natural Correct word choice
it damages
environment
.
There are some solution
to Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
takle
that causes. The first one is the Correct your spelling
tackle
take
goverment
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government
make
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makes
the
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apply
regulation
to give Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
panushment
if Correct your spelling
punishment
people
or companies are doing the
illegal Correct article usage
apply
loging
. so that they will be afraid to do that. Correct your spelling
logging
As a result
, it declined risk
damage the natural Correct article usage
the risk
environment
. The second one is the company must do rehabalitation
after they Correct your spelling
rehabilitation
did
Wrong verb form
do
exploration
some Replace the word
explored
are
Wrong verb form
industries
industry
, for example
making planting of trees to overcome extinct wood, then
the goverment
can control every Correct your spelling
government
companies
if they do not do that they get Change to a singular noun
company
finalty
. Correct your spelling
finally
finality
Therofore
, the ecology will Correct your spelling
Therefore
safe
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save
life
in Fix the agreement mistake
lives
this
area after they did
that.
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do
To sum up
, there Add a missing verb
are same
same
cases Correct your spelling
some
damage
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of damage
environment
like illegal loging
and Correct your spelling
logging
buillding
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building
industry
areas
. However
, to overcome this
problem the government make
a regulation to decline Wrong verb form
made
exploration
the
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of the
forest
, and the company need
to do rehabilitation after they used the Wrong verb form
needed
areas
. I recommend most people
must understand effect
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the effect
damage
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of damage
inveronment
if they do Correct your spelling
environment
deferestation
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deforestation
such
as blood and another problems
.Replace the adjective
another problem
other problems
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