The given line graph below illustrates the total sales of three pizza brands in Vietnam during 2017.

The given line graph below illustrates the total sales of three pizza brands in Vietnam during 2017.
The line graph below illustrates the total
sales
of three
pizza
brands in Vietnam in 2017.
Overall
, all figures for the three
pizza
restaurants experienced a fluctuation during the year.
While
the
Pizza
company, Domino
Pizza
both showed general growth in
sales
over the year,
Pizza
Hut ‘s
sales
figures saw a decrease
overall
. Both
Pizza
company, Domino
Pizza
followed a very similar trend, beginning at about 34 and 31
million
dollars, respectively. Both mentioned figures had fluctuating patterns over the 12-month period, with
Pizza
company’s revenue in July reaching the highest peak ( over 40$
million
) and
then
declining slightly before increasing again to approximately 34
million
dollars
at the end
of the period. At the same time, the
sales
of Domio
Pizza
also
rose by nearly 33$
million
after reducing moderately from June to November.
Pizza
Hut, on the the hand, had a lower share of the market. That figure for remaining restaurants started at 13$
million
in January before oscillating through the year to plummet
the
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lowest bottom in December ( around 3
million
dollars )
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