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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below illustrates
consumers
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consumer
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products
two
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in two
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 countries which
was
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were
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expendetured
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expanded
 in 2010.
Overall
, it can
be see
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be seen
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,
those
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that those
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of
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apply
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in United Kindom and Frances were cars which were the biggest spending pound sterling than other items using product
pounds
 sterling. Meanwhile, the lowest was perfume
consumer
 goods
consumer
 good. Look at
details
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the details
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, In
United
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the United
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 Kindom cars
was
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were
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 the biggest using
consumer
good
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goods
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 at at 450.000
pounds
 sterling followed by Books
was
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apply
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the
socond
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second
 bigger at the point 400.000. Compared to Computers and Cameras were the same using
products
. The lowest was Perfume at
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approximately
approximatelly
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approximately
 155.000.
consumer
good
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goods
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pounds
 sterling Regarding the data in France cars
was
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were
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 the highest at 400.000 using
products
. And
then
 the second bigger
was
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were
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 computers at amount 355.000 compared to Books was the
fugure
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figure
future
 at 300.000
consumer
 goods
then
parfume
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perfume
 was at 200.000. using
products
. And
then
 Cameras
was
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were
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 the lowest at point 150.000
consumer
good
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goods
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pounds
 sterling.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, pounds, consumer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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