task 2: people think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. give you own opinion,

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One school of thought holds that the
cost
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of fuel for transportation should be charged more by the
government
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as a solution to environmental problems.
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it may be useful for some reasons, I would believe that there are more sufficient measures to deal with environmental issues. On the one hand, there are positive effects to the idea of increasing the
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of energy used by
cars
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or other means of transport. The foremost advantage is the possibility
to decrease
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of decreasing
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the number of journeys by conventionally fueled
transports
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among
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people as
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increases may cause them financial problems.
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renders more citizens to choose public transport
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as buses or trams for much more reasonable fees.
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, the money raised can be used to invest in researching
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hybrid
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or completely electricity-generating
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and improve public transport’s qualities. With the former, the atmosphere can be better without dust and toxic emissions,
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the latter encourages residents to use buses or trams more frequently, escalating into a habit.
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, the aforementioned idea only aims to solve limited facets of environmental s including air pollution and energy concerns. To solve the issues from the roots, more effective measures are necessary.
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to the cooperation between individuals and the
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. The
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should spend money to educate and raise people’s awareness about the seriousness of environmental matters.
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means that individuals may pay attention to and favour friendly-environment products or schemes.
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, enforcing assistance policies to firms which contribute to preserving the environment through innovating products or inventing tools helps to gain benefits for the environment
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and
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also
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sustainable economics. Take,
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, the Vinfast car brand,
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has emerged lately with the aim of developing electric
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and motorbikes, it now expanding its business as a technological electric taxi brand thanks to the insurance from the authority and widely introducing it to national TV channels. In conclusion,
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acknowledging that the increase in the
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of fuel for transportation may have some particular benefits, I contend that there should be more sufficient measures given by the
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and
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cooperation with individuals.
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