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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the expenses on consumer goods of
France
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 and the United Kingdom in 2010.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 has higher expenditure on cars, books and cameras
whereas
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,
France
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 has more expenditure on computers and perfumes for the given year. The highest expenditure in both countries is on cars which is 450,000 and 400,000
pounds
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 in the
UK
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 and
France
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 respectively.Expenses on cameras and computers are equal to 350,000
pounds
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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. Books have the second highest expense in the
UK
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 which is 400,000 and it
tallys
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tallies
 with the highest sale
on
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in
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France
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 which is on cars. The lowest expenses are on perfumes in the
UK
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 which marks just below 150,000
pounds
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. The lowest in
France
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 is on cameras making a sale of 150,000
pounds
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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