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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countrys. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweighs the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #countrys
Education is said to be the major tool to improve human behaviour and in
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recent
time
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, many
students
 are opting for admission
in
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 higher institutions
that
is
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 outside of their
nation
 of residence.
This
 essay will discuss not only its advantages but
also
 to show that the demerits
is
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 not at all important to think
off
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. The first advantage is exposure to
learn
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modern
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way
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 of solving
national
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the national
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problem
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problems
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. Studying in another
nation
open
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 up
students
 to a more
experiental
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experimental
experiential
 approach to a national
problem
 which has defile
solution
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solutions
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 of
expert
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experts
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 in the country,
students
 who study in
such
field
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a field
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 in a
nation
 where they are more experienced and have been known for their success in
such
 field can be fixed to solve
such
problem
 by the time they return to their
nation
 after completion of their academic year.
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, The
nation
 of Zimbabwe sent some young
graduate
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graduates
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 in agriculture to Nigeria for a postgraduate program in agriculture that
focus
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 on palm kernel planting for the production of palm oil and
30years
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30 years
 later, they became the world exporter of palm oil. The second merit is
improvement
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the improvement
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 of international
relationship
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relationships
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. Many nations are experiencing smooth cross business
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 because of the educational exchange
program
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programs
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 that they enter into.
This
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ochestrated
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orchestrated
 shared
solution
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solutions
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on
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 national issues.
For example
, ECOWAS which is an organization of
Africa
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 nations was established many years ago by
students
 during one of their joint
conference
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eventhough
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even though
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cript
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crept
 into many territories in
this
 tie. In conclusion,
better
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problem solving
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problem-solving
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 approach and international friendship are two main
merit
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 of studying abroad,
although
 insecurity is a major demerit
however
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, the positive profit that
come
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comes
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 from
these arrangement
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 far
outweigh
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 the negative side effect.
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task response
Clarify and expand on main points. Some arguments and examples need more elaboration to be fully compelling.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling. There are some inaccuracies that could be distracting to the reader.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are clear and well structured.
task response
You provided relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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