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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs depict the correlation between the
number
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 of mobile and fixed
phone
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 subscribers in four different nations -
Eritrea
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,
India
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, The UK and
Uruguay
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 - from 2005 to 2015.
According to
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 the data,
Uruguay
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 displayed the highest
subscriptions
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 for mobile phones,
while
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 the UK accounted for the largest
number
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 of fixed
phone
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subscriptions
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.
Eritrea
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 showed similar trends in both categories. It is noteworthy that both
subscriptions
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 in
India
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 exhibited different results. The
number
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 of mobile
subscriptions
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 in The UK increased from 100
people
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 in 2005 to 125
people
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 in the following year, and
this
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 figure remained relatively steady until 2015,
while
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 the
number
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 of fixed telephone
subscriptions
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 decreased slightly over the decade, except for a small rise in 2009. The
number
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 of
Uruguay
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's mobile
subscriptions
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 had risen by 2013, peaking at 150
people
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 which hit a record high, and
then
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 gradually dropped until 2015 with 140 subscribers.
In contrast
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,
this
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 trend for fixed mobile in
Uruguay
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 had only 35
people
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 in the year 2015, reaching the same level as the figure at the beginning of the period. In terms of the other countries,
India
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's data presents a stark contrast in its mobile and fixed
phone
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subscriptions
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. Over the decade, mobile
subscriptions
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 in
India
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 saw significant growth from a mere 1 person in 2005 to an impressive 80
people
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 in 2015.
Conversely
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, the fixed
phone
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subscriptions
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 in
India
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 showed a negative trend, dropping as low as
Eritrea
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 at only one person.
Eritrea
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,
on the other hand
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, was the only country where the trends in both
subscriptions
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 remained essentially unchanged, with small fractions.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, phone, eritrea, india, uruguay, subscriptions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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