The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the digger will dig the Linking Words
clay
Use synonyms
then
it will be put in the metal grid for rolling it. Linking Words
Then
, it will be mixed with the sand and water in the wire cutter or a mould Linking Words
for turning
into a Change preposition
to turn
brick
. After that, the Use synonyms
brick
Use synonyms
Linking Words
then
put into the drying Add a missing verb
was then
owen
. Correct your spelling
oven
Owen
Then
, the Linking Words
brick
is put in the Use synonyms
kiln
and Use synonyms
cooling
chamber after put in the Correct article usage
the cooling
kiln
. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
brick
is Use synonyms
being
packaged and ready for delivery.
Unnecessary verb
apply
First,
the digger Linking Words
dig
Change the verb form
digs
the
large amount of Change the article
a
the
Correct article usage
apply
clay
. Use synonyms
Second,
the Linking Words
clay
will be put in the metal grid for rolling. Use synonyms
Third,
the Linking Words
clay
will be mixed with the sand and the water, Use synonyms
then
it will be put in the wire or the mould for turning into the Linking Words
bricks
. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
bricks
are put into the drying oven for 24 to 48 hours.
Use synonyms
Next,
the Linking Words
bricks
will Use synonyms
then
be put in the Linking Words
kiln
for moderating for 200 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
celsuis
to 980 Correct your spelling
celsius
Use synonyms
celsuis
Correct your spelling
celsius
,
and put in the Remove the comma
apply
kiln
again for 870 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
celsuis
to 1300 Correct your spelling
celsius
Use synonyms
celsuis
. Correct your spelling
celsius
Then
, the Linking Words
bricks
are put in the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours after it is put in the Use synonyms
kiln
. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
bricks
are Use synonyms
pakaged
, and it is readied for delivery.Correct your spelling
packaged
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