The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the digger will dig the
clay
then
it will be put in the metal grid for rolling it.
Then
, it will be mixed with the sand and water in the wire cutter or a mould
for turning
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to turn
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into a
brick
. After that, the
brick
then
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was then
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put into the drying
owen
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oven
Owen
.
Then
, the
brick
is put in the
kiln
and
cooling
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the cooling
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chamber after put in the
kiln
.
Then
, the
brick
is
being
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packaged and ready for delivery.
First,
the digger
dig
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digs
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the
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a
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large amount of
the
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clay
.
Second,
the
clay
will be put in the metal grid for rolling.
Third,
the
clay
will be mixed with the sand and the water,
then
it will be put in the wire or the mould for turning into the
bricks
.
Then
, the
bricks
are put into the drying oven for 24 to 48 hours.
Next,
the
bricks
will
then
be put in the
kiln
for moderating for 200
celsuis
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celsius
to 980
celsuis
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celsius
,
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and put in the
kiln
again for 870
celsuis
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celsius
to 1300
celsuis
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celsius
.
Then
, the
bricks
are put in the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours after it is put in the
kiln
.
Finally
, the
bricks
are
pakaged
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packaged
, and it is readied for delivery.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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