The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the builing industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the builing industry. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the digger will dig the
clay
then
it will be put in the metal grid for rolling it.
Then
, it will be mixed with the sand and water in the wire cutter or a mould to turn into a
brick
. After that, the
brick
was
then
put into the drying oven.
Then
, the
brick
is put in the
kiln
and the cooling chamber after put in the
kiln
.
Then
, the
brick
is packaged and ready for delivery.
First,
the digger digs a large amount of
clay
.
Second,
the
clay
will be put in the metal grid for rolling.
Third,
the
clay
will be mixed with the sand and the water,
then
it will be put in the wire or the mould for turning into the
bricks
.
Then
, the
bricks
are put into the drying oven for 24 to 48 hours.
Next,
the
bricks
will
then
be put in the
kiln
for moderating
for
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200
celsius
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Celsius
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to 980
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Celsius
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,
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and put in the
kiln
again for 870
celsius
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Celsius
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to 1300
celsius
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Celsius
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.
Then
, the
bricks
are put in the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours after it is put in the
kiln
.
Finally
, the
bricks
are packaged, and it is readied for delivery.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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