The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the builing industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the digger will dig the clay
then
it will be put in the metal grid for rolling it. Then
, it will be mixed with the sand and water in the wire cutter or a mould to turn into a brick
. After that, the brick
was then
put into the drying oven. Then
, the brick
is put in the kiln
and the cooling chamber after put in the kiln
. Then
, the brick
is packaged and ready for delivery.
First,
the digger digs a large amount of clay
. Second,
the clay
will be put in the metal grid for rolling. Third,
the clay
will be mixed with the sand and the water, then
it will be put in the wire or the mould for turning into the bricks
. Then
, the bricks
are put into the drying oven for 24 to 48 hours.
Next,
the bricks
will then
be put in the kiln
for moderating for
200 Change preposition
from
celsius
to 980 Capitalize word
Celsius
celsius
Capitalize word
Celsius
,
and put in the Remove the comma
apply
kiln
again for 870 celsius
to 1300 Capitalize word
Celsius
celsius
. Capitalize word
Celsius
Then
, the bricks
are put in the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours after it is put in the kiln
. Finally
, the bricks
are packaged, and it is readied for delivery.Submitted by dondollaraus on
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