The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the builing industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the digger will dig the Linking Words
clay
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then
it will be put in the metal grid for rolling it. Linking Words
Then
, it will be mixed with the sand and water in the wire cutter or a mould to turn into a Linking Words
brick
. After that, the Use synonyms
brick
was Use synonyms
then
put into the drying oven. Linking Words
Then
, the Linking Words
brick
is put in the Use synonyms
kiln
and the cooling chamber after put in the Use synonyms
kiln
. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
brick
is packaged and ready for delivery.
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First,
the digger digs a large amount of Linking Words
clay
. Use synonyms
Second,
the Linking Words
clay
will be put in the metal grid for rolling. Use synonyms
Third,
the Linking Words
clay
will be mixed with the sand and the water, Use synonyms
then
it will be put in the wire or the mould for turning into the Linking Words
bricks
. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
bricks
are put into the drying oven for 24 to 48 hours.
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Next,
the Linking Words
bricks
will Use synonyms
then
be put in the Linking Words
kiln
for moderating Use synonyms
for
200 Change preposition
from
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celsius
to 980 Capitalize word
Celsius
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celsius
Capitalize word
Celsius
,
and put in the Remove the comma
apply
kiln
again for 870 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
celsius
to 1300 Capitalize word
Celsius
Use synonyms
celsius
. Capitalize word
Celsius
Then
, the Linking Words
bricks
are put in the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours after it is put in the Use synonyms
kiln
. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
bricks
are packaged, and it is readied for delivery.Use synonyms
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