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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people consuming a typical five-portion portion of fruits and vegetables per day in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008. The general overview here is that over the period, there were significant increases in the consumption of five typical women at 35 per
cent
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 from 2006 to 2007,
while
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, in 2007 children received fruits and vegetable leat at 26 per
cent
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.
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 the data, in the consumption group between girls and boys, there was began from 2001 to 2007, there was a booster starting at 24 per
cent
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 and
additionally
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, there was a peak at 35 per
cent
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,
although
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 from 2007 to 2008, there was a drop dramatically.
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, the
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 began at 16 per
cent
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, and there was an increase in essential at 28 per
cent
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 in 2006.
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, the rate of children started at 13 per
cent
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 after 2004, there were elite at 26 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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