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The charts below show the percentages in typical meaks of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages in typical meaks of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts clearly
demonstrates
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 the proportion of additives in four daily meals of Americans, which are considered unhealthy if consumed excessively.
Overall
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, it is evident that dinner dishes have the most amount of saturated fat and
sodium
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,
whereas
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 snacks incorporate sugar more than any other
meals
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meal
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. Looking at snacks and breakfast dishes, they have
a
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the
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 same
amout
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amount
 of
sodium
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 in them with 14% of the whole.
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, when it comes to saturated fat, they both have more of that with 21% for the former and 16% for the
later
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latter
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. Meanwhile, snacks consist of the most
amout
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amount
 of sugar consumed with more than 40%.
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, the same figure for breakfast is less than a fifth. As far as lunch and dinner are concerned, the latter is the absolute leader in incorporating
sodium
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 and fat with 43% and 37% respectively.
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, with
having
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23% of the consumed
suger
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sugar
, dinner takes the second place in
this
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 figure. In comparison, lunch has less than a third percentage of
intaken
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sodium
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 and fat,
coupled with
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 an estimated 20% of sugar.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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