The line graph shows the information for internet users as percentage of population in three countries from 1999 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the information for internet users as percentage of population in three countries from 1999 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar graph illustrates the
population
of
elephants
in Asian countries in two different years, 1997 and 2004. It was clear that the majority of the
number
of
elephants
tended to decrease over a 7-year period in all nations, except Cambodia. India had the highest quantity of
elephants
and the opposite was true for China. The country with the largest
population
of
elephants
in both years was India with approximately 10000
elephants
in 1997 and
then
declined to 7500
elephants
in 2004. Followed was Myanmar with the
second - highest
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maximum
number
of
this
species which
is
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5500 and 5000 in 1997 and 2004, respectively. In 1997, the
population
of
elephants
in Thailand was just less than 1500 compared with Myanmar and
then
substantially decreased to lower than 2000 in 2004. Malaysia and Sri Lanka had the same quantity - 3000
elephants
in 1997,
however
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in 2004, the
number
of
elephants
in Malaysia dropped to 1000 which is lower than approximately 1900 compared with Sri Lanka. In 1997, the
number
of Asian
elephants
in 4 countries namely Vietnam, Cambodia, Laos and China
were
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just between 1000 and 1500.
However
,Lao’s elephant
population
slightly rose in 2004 which was
in contrast
with other countries.
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