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The diagram below shows the foor plan of a public hibrary 20 years ago and how it looks now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the foor plan of a public hibrary 20 years ago and how it looks now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps of
central
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library
 above
depicts
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depict
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 the
comparation
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comparison
 between 20 years ago and nowadays,
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and presents
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presents
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present
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 the changing of the positions and functions of different rooms. It is notable that the central
library
 now,
comparing
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compared
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 to the previous display, has new rooms added, which are
lecture
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a lecture
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 room and cafe. The reason that lecture
room
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rooms
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 and
cafe
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cafes
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 were added, is because of the trend of 'multi-functions
libirary
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library
', which includes reading, studying, meeting, presentation
practicing
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practising
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 and entertainment in one
library
. As observed, there is another significant difference between the two maps, the enquiry desk,
that
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which
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 took an
importance
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 place 20 years ago, has
dispeared
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disappeared
.
Instead
 of
enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk, nowadays three self-service machines and a small information desk are
presenting
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presented
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in
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on
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 the map.
Furthermore
, the tables and chairs in the middle
also
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have also
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 been moved, meanwhile, the area
of
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for
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 children's books and computer room have been
remianed
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remained
.
To sum up
, the central
library
 has
became
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become
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 more
funtional
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functional
, the the same time, replacing some
area
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areas
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 with new techniques,
such
 as self-service machines and so on.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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