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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
two
to
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maps illustrate city
hospital
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hospitals
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 in the year
of
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2007 and 2010.
Overall
, in 2007,
path
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the path
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 was straight
which
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and
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 headed directly to the health centre but in 2010,
two
 ring
road
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roads
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are
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were
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 introduced to reach the hospital. To start with, in the year 2007, the Stop was located in
east
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the east
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 direction but in 2010 it
is
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was
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 relocated to
west
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the west
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side
 and near
to
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the hospital. There are
two
 roundabouts and both
connects
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the
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 bus stop.
Furthermore
, one roundabout connects
city
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the city
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 road on
east
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the east
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side
 like in 2007. Earlier in 2007,
main
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the main
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 road
, has
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 contained trees on both
of
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its
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apply
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side
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sides
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however
, later after
two
introduction
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introductions
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of
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two
 circle trees
are
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were
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 removed.
Moreover
,
at
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in
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 past times there
were
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was
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 joint parking for staff and
public
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the public
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at
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in
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 South-East direction.
Although
 2010 separate
parkings
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parking
 are made
that is
public
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a public
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 car park at North-East
side
 and staff can park is placed in South-East
side
 only.
In addition
,
two
roundbouts
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roundabouts
connects
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connect
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bus
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the bus
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 station and one of them opens in
parking
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the parking
a parking
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 area
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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