Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity (those teaching programmes that involve the use of written materials, videos, televised lessons and the Internet), but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whilst public believes that courses are better delivered in class rather than
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beneficial for both. On the one hand, health issues which limited us to have interaction and lack of transportation
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tackle us to get education. To
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and learning
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distance learning
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who
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may face some disturbance that can
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their focus and motivation to have
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education from
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interactive than
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online.
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may reduce and it will
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student attention and increase their motivation. In conclusion,
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of distance learning that
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offline,
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there are more
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school in
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