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in many contries, the number of animals and plants is declining. why do you think this is happening? how can this issue be solved?

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Nowaday
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, the rate of flora and fauna are decreasing
due to
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lot
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, so
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 think that it
is
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originated from old
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vehicle
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 and petrochemical
factoy
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factors
. there are several ways to address
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problems
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they
 will be faced with reducing the number of animals and plants. because
in
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many
state
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 do not have stricter
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masure
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measures
 for using old
vehical
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vehicles
. so ,
people
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check
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thier
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their
car
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 comprehensively or they
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used
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vehicle
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 for
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 time.
therefore
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 produced a
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pollutions
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 during
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 day which can have direct effects on
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pollutin
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pollution
then
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term
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destroyed
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ozon
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ozone
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another
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 noticeable
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 come from petrochemical
factories
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in other words
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, many
factories
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 do not value
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air
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 so, just
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focus
 on increasing the amount of product in any situation, because they believe that lubricating the wheels of
industry
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 is important.
however
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, old car and petrochemical
factories
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negetive
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negative
 effects on animals and plants. there are several ways to
solved
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this
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this problem
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problems
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formest
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, the main
responseble
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responsibility
 goes for the
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governments
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.
in other words
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government
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 can
put
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law
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laws
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 for
people
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 who
utiliz
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use
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vehicle
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. for the first time using fines for
people
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do
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thier
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their
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vehicle
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then
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solitray
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solitary
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another things
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government
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 can have a
lot
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 of offers for society who like to replace
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their
 old
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vehicle
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vehicles
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brand
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electrical
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car
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. not paying taxes can be the best way to encourage
people
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 to change their can.
secondly
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, petrochemical
factories
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make
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 a
lot
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 of pollution in the
air
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 by using fossil
fule
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fuels
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for producing
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 energy during
a
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the
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 day. so , governments can put big fines
to
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factories
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used
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such
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fule
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fuel
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. on
other
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 hand, if
factories
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tendency
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renewble
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renewable
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fuel
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,
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governmet
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government
governments
 consider financial aid. in conclusion, these days
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 the number of animals and plants
decresed
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decreased
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due
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air
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polliution
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pollution
 which
is
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originated
form
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from
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 old
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 and petrochemical
factories
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task achievement
You have addressed the task and provided some ideas related to the reasons for the decline in plants and animals and possible solutions. However, the ideas could be more clearly expressed and better supported with specific examples and evidence.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the transitions between ideas can be smoother, and some sentences could be more clearly connected to improve the overall flow.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, provide more detailed and relevant examples. For instance, mention specific countries or cities successfully implementing policies to reduce pollution from old vehicles and factories.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to make your ideas clearer and more comprehensible. For example, avoid long and complex sentences that can confuse the reader.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has an introduction and conclusion, which helps give it a clear structure.
supported main points
You have identified relevant issues (old vehicles and petrochemical factories) and suggested logical solutions (government regulations and incentives).
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