in many contries, the number of animals and plants is declining. why do you think this is happening? how can this issue be solved?
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pollution
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fuel
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government
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vehicles
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task achievement
You have addressed the task and provided some ideas related to the reasons for the decline in plants and animals and possible solutions. However, the ideas could be more clearly expressed and better supported with specific examples and evidence.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the transitions between ideas can be smoother, and some sentences could be more clearly connected to improve the overall flow.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, provide more detailed and relevant examples. For instance, mention specific countries or cities successfully implementing policies to reduce pollution from old vehicles and factories.
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