in many contries, the number of animals and plants is declining. why do you think this is happening? how can this issue be solved?

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, the rate of flora and fauna are decreasing
due to
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lot
of
problems
, so
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think that it
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originated from old
vehicle
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and petrochemical
factoy
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factors
. there are several ways to address
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problems
.
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with, many countries
thay
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they
will be faced with reducing the number of animals and plants. because
in
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many
state
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states
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do not have stricter
law
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laws
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and
masure
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measures
for using old
vehical
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vehicles
. so ,
people
do not pay attention to
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thier
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their
car
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comprehensively or they
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used
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vehicle
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for
long
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time.
therefore
,
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old
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produced a
lot
of
pollutions
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during
a
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day which can have direct effects on
air
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pollution
then
in the long
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may
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ozon
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ozone
layer.
another
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noticeable
problems
come from petrochemical
factories
.
in other words
, many
factories
do not value
to
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air
so, just
foucs
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focus
on increasing the amount of product in any situation, because they believe that lubricating the wheels of
industry
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is important.
however
, old car and petrochemical
factories
can have
negetive
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negative
effects on animals and plants. there are several ways to
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this
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problems
. first and
formest
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, the main
responseble
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responsibility
goes for the
govrments
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governments
government
.
in other words
,
government
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the government
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can
put
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pass
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strict
law
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laws
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for
people
who
utiliz
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use
old
vehicle
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vehicles
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. for the first time using fines for
people
do
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who do
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not pay attention to
thier
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their
old
vehicle
.
then
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solitary
cell can be answered.
another things
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,
government
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can have a
lot
of offers for society who like to replace
thier
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their
old
vehicle
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vehicles
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with
brand
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new
electrical
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car
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. not paying taxes can be the best way to encourage
people
to change their can.
secondly
, petrochemical
factories
can
make
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a
lot
of pollution in the
air
by using fossil
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fuels
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for producing
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energy during
a
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the
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day. so , governments can put big fines
to
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on
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factories
if they
used
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such
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fuel
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. on
other
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hand, if
factories
tendency
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to utilize
renewble
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renewable
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fuel
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,
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the governmet
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governmet
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government
governments
consider financial aid. in conclusion, these days
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, unfortunately,
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the number of animals and plants
decresed
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decreased
duo
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due
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to
air
polliution
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pollution
which
is
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originated
form
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from
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old
vehicle
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vehicles
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and petrochemical
factories
.
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