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The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate plans to change
city
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the city
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 layout of Brisbane since 1975.
Overall
, over the years, both maps have
maintaned
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maintained
 distinct river and town areas and extensive construction of housing,
play ground
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playgrounds
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,
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and school
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school
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schools
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.
unfortuantly
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Unfortunately
, those have been built with
effecting
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affecting
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on
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apply
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natural resources to
great
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a great
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 extent. To the
north west
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northwest
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 of the industrial
area
,
apart
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a part
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 of the farmland was demolished and built housing. In the
center
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centre
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 of the
area
, all of the factories were knocked- down in order to
contructed
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construct
 a large number of housing. the more noticeable feature is that
school
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the school
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 was constructed in the east of
area
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the area
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 for the children near the
play ground
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playground
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 to benefit from
this
area
 to do some
activites
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activities
, like football.
moreover
, most of the facilities are located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
area
 that people can
eassily
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easily
to
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apply
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access
all
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apply
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them
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apply
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,
like
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apply
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shops and
medical
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the medical
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center
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centers
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. after that, the road was extended in the
area
 to
facilitated
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facilitate
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 the transport in whole of the
area
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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