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Band 2.5

Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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the
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people
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 the home, and they do not have any time for cooking, so they prefer eating meals in
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restaurants
restaurant
.
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people
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 that
resturantemust
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restaurant must
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recipes
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information
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 clients.
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, I still believe that these cannot overshadow the benefits.
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information
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have
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 some merits.
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, if
costumers
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customers
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 see the nutritional
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,
then
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 can choose foods that are good for them. To illustrate, I cannot eat foods and
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 that have
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a
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correts
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that
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I have
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allergy
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allergy
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it
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, when I go to
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a resturant
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resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
 I have to ask about food from waiter.
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, Athleth and
people
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 who have
diet
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 like know about the
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calories
 and things that
using
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 in the food.
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, these
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 might be some
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variety
 of demerits. when
people
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information
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mey
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don
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 not go to some
resturant
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restaurant
 because they do not like the
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initial
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, another reason that makes
this
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 process impossible is that great chefs usually do not measure everything which is added, in fact, they put their experience into action. In conclusion, I take
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 view that its demerits don’t always outweigh its merits and in a few cases might be probably equal and each manager should consider the situation.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea and develop it fully before moving to the next point.
task achievement
Check spelling, grammar, and punctuation more carefully to avoid small errors that can distract readers.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases like 'for example,' 'moreover,' and 'on the other hand' to help connect your ideas more smoothly.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments and make them stronger.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, showing an effort to provide a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is clear.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutritional information
  • Calorie count
  • Public health
  • Informed choices
  • Accountability
  • Dietary requirements
  • Logistics
  • Analyzing
  • Unhealthy ingredients
  • Consumer
  • Health outcomes
  • Gluten-free
  • Overemphasis
  • Comprehensive understanding
  • Dining experience
  • Clinical experience
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