The graph gives information about the number of books which were borrowed from four village libraries namely West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood and Church Mount from June until September in 2014, and the pie chart shows a breakdown of kinds of book borrowed during the period.
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The line graph shows information about the
number
of books that were borrowed from four different libraries in 2014, with Correct article usage
a piechart
piechart
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pie chart
illustrates
the proportion of various types of books over the four months.
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Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the number
of West Eaton and Church Mount, while
the number
of Ryeslip rocketed down, another interesting point is that the number
of Sutton Wood went down during the period suddenly rocketed up.
It can be seen that,
the borrowing for Sutton Wood started at 300 in June after that was Remove the comma
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100 in August. Change preposition
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the end of the period was Change the preposition
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the top, Change preposition
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while
the number
of Ryeslip was at 300 in June then
went down at
over 200 in September.
Looking at the details, the Change preposition
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number
of both West Eaton and Church Mount were
rose during the period from 50 to 150.Unnecessary verb
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