The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart gives information about 3 types of crimes that the rate
os
cases committed from 1970 to 2005 in two Correct your spelling
of
area
in England and Wales .
Change to a plural noun
areas
Overall
, the line illustrates three categories of criminal its
car theft , Correct pronoun usage
apply
houses
burgling and street robbery as observed that in the year 1995 Fix the agreement mistake
house
that
the top rate was car theft Correct word choice
apply
wilhe
the Correct your spelling
while
with
less
number of crimes was street robbery.
Now Turing to details , the trend of car theft Correct word choice
lowest
was
increased dramatically between Unnecessary verb
apply
in
1970 Change preposition
apply
until
1990 after that the Correct word choice
and
the
number of crimes Remove the redundancy
apply
rise
sharply to Wrong verb form
rose
peak
point in 1995s to reach 1.60 Add an article
a peak
millions
Change to singular
million
subsequently
the figures dropping rocketed to stop it on one million.
On the other hand
Change noun form
house
house's
burgling Change noun form
house
was gorwth
gradually till 1975s after which unchanged between 1980 Verb problem
grew
to
1985 following that the rate of Correct word choice
and
houses
burgling was rose slowly Fix the agreement mistake
house
Correct word choice
and then
then
Correct word choice
and then
goes decreasing
.Wrong verb form
decreased
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