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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart gives information about 3 types of crimes that the rate
os
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of
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 cases committed from 1970 to 2005 in two
area
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areas
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 in England and Wales .
Overall
, the line illustrates three categories of criminal
its
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apply
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car theft ,
houses
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house
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 burgling and street robbery as observed that in the year 1995
that
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apply
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the top rate was car theft
wilhe
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while
with
 the
less
Correct word choice
lowest
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 number of crimes was street robbery. Now Turing to details , the trend of car theft
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased dramatically between
in
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apply
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1970
until
Correct word choice
and
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 1990 after that the
the
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apply
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number of crimes
rise
Wrong verb form
rose
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 sharply to
peak
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a peak
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 point in 1995s to reach 1.60
millions
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million
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subsequently
 the figures dropping rocketed to stop it on one million.
On the other hand
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house
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house's
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house
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 burgling
was gorwth
Verb problem
grew
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 gradually till 1975s after which unchanged between 1980
to
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and
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 1985 following that the rate of
houses
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house
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 burgling was rose slowly
Correct word choice
and then
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then
Correct word choice
and then
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goes decreasing
Wrong verb form
decreased
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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