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You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email, • give details of the purchase • describe the problem • explain why you need a replacement urgently

#purchase #email #company #replacement
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 to inform you that I bought a few costumes from your company at
amazon
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Amazon
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, and am discontented with the purchase I made. To be specific, I ordered one formal skirt and a white shirt.
However
,
while
doing
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apply
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shopping online, I realised that the stuff I chose for the outfit was
of
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apply
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cotton but when I received the parcel, it was
of
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apply
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polyster
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polyester
. Not only
this
 but the size of the skirt was
also
 unappealing.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, I require that outfit very urgently because I have a seminar just after two days, and I will be the post
in
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at
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 the event. kindly provide me a replacement as soon as possible. I will look forward to the
amendmants
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amendments
amendment
 you make.
your
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yours
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 faithfully,
komal
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Komal
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 Verma
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task achievement
Ensure the use of proper capitalization and formal expressions throughout the letter, such as 'Sir/Madam' and 'Yours faithfully, Komal Verma'.
task achievement
Clarify and elaborate on the key points to give more specific details, especially regarding the dissatisfaction with the order.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for better clarity and flow.
coherence cohesion
Your email could benefit from a stronger conclusion that revisits the reason for the urgent replacement and politely reiterates your request.
task achievement
You have clearly stated the purpose of your email and provided details of your purchase, which helps in addressing the issue efficiently.
task achievement
The main points, such as the material and size issues, are relevant and directly related to your dissatisfaction.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the email is logical; it includes an introduction, body, and a wrapping-up request, making it easy to follow.

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