Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today, what are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?
One of the most major
problem
that the world is facing today is global warming. Change to a plural noun
problems
Government
and special Correct article usage
The government
people
trying to find what measures are need
to tackle the issue.
Global warming has a few disadvantages to Change the verb form
are needed
survive
, planting and so on. Replace the word
survival
For instance
, nowadays, water can be
Wrong verb form
is
lower
than past, Correct word choice
less
planting
a different type of plants Correct word choice
and planting
can
Verb problem
has
becoming
impossible and less, now. Climate Wrong verb form
become
changes
Fix the agreement mistake
change
are
the cause of these problems. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
In addition
, these trouble’s creators are people
. The world is growing and improving, but people
are forgetting to care about nature
. Our nature
not
a long-term resource that Add a missing verb
is not
given
to us. Add the auxiliary verb
is given
Also
, drying of water resources lead
to global warming, Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
due to
being wet in nature
is significant for planet Earth.
In these times, responsible persons and individuals trying to reduce the issue. Take public meetings as an example. A group of people
gathering and trying to find solution
Add an article
the solution
a solution
of
Change preposition
to
this
problem. They are hearing the opinions and suggestions of the population of the state. As a consequence
, people
can think about nature
, especially global problems such
as global heating. In addition
, we need to buy trees, plants, beautiful flowers, and unusual grasses also
. From my perspective, each person must understand for himself the importance of this
problem and begin to deal with it today. Everyone should plant trees or fragrant flowers in their small garden or around their house and take care of them.
To sum
up
briefly, it is evident that there are a lot of the causes of global warming, but all the causes have solutions and alternatives. These problems can be solved by Add a comma
up,
people
coming together.Submitted by omondavlat91 on
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task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to the prompt by discussing both the causes of global warming and measures to tackle the issue. However, it would benefit from deeper analysis and more specific examples. You could, for instance, describe specific government policies or individual actions in more detail.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your thoughts more logically. For example, you might first discuss all the causes of global warming before moving on to solutions. Clearer topic sentences for each paragraph could help guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with more detailed examples or evidence. For instance, you could mention specific climate change effects or describe successful initiatives against global warming. This would add more depth and clarity to your arguments.
general
There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing in your essay. Consider revising sentences for clarity and correctness. Reading more academic texts and practicing writing regularly could also help improve your language skills.
general
For a higher score, you could introduce more advanced vocabulary and complex sentence structures. Utilizing a variety of sentence patterns and vocabulary will make your essay more engaging and demonstrate your language proficiency.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the discussion well.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed both parts of the prompt by discussing the causes and solutions for global warming.
task achievement
The discussion on public meetings and individual actions shows a thoughtful consideration of the issue, reflecting awareness and a positive outlook towards solving global warming.
Your opinion
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