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The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The chart above displays the main factors causing productivity declines in agriculture during the 1990s. At
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 was over-grazing, which was the leading reason greatly impacting productivity,
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 up more than a quarter of the statistic at 35%. Following it, respectively at 30% and 28%, were deforestation and over-cultivation. The
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 were other unspecified, varied causes. Looking more specifically, Europe was the area most impacted by deforestation and over-cultivation, amounting to more than half of the cause for its land's decline in quality. Meanwhile,
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second place was Oceania. which faced the problem of over-grazing way greater than the other two regions. North America came up as the region with the least problem of land degradation at only 5%.
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