The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
These pie charts illustrate
usage
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the usage
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of
devices
that have been used for watching television by
18
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the 18
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-25 age group in Canada in 2009 and 2019. In 2009, conventional
TV
gave the largest contribution among the
usage
of other
devices
at 34% but in 2019, it only gave only 4%.
This
decline happened for desktop computers and laptops too. In 2009, the
usage
of desktop computers was 18%;
nevertheless
, the
usage
of laptops was 20%. The
usage
of desktop computers and laptops only
contribute
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contributed
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12% each in 2019 giving them both
on
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the second lowest
devices
that have been used for watching television. The highest escalation happened for flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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, from only 8% who
use
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used
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it
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them
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to watch television in 2009, it became 27% in 2019.
This
escalation did not happen only on flat screen
TV
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TVs
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, tablets and mobile phones experienced it too. In conclusion, there are differences
about
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in
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devices
that have been used for watching
TV
by the 18-25 age group in Canada. The biggest escalation happened for flat-screen
TV
use and the most significant drop happened for conventional
TV
usage
.
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