The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table above informs the data regarding
Australia
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and
Malaysia
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's general
population
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in 1980 and 2002. It shows that the
population
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from
both
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countries increased in the span of two decades, with
slightly
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a slightly
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higher
rate
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in
Malaysia
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. Interestingly,
Australia
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had seen a moderate jump in older
population
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above
65-year-old
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65 years old
, a little over
Malaysia
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's less than 1% increase.
While
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both
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countries had a lower birth
rate
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in 2002, the annual
population
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growth still
shown
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showed
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a rather constant percentage, only budging 0.1% up in
Australia
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and 0.3% down in
Malaysia
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.
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Population
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The population
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rate
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for
both
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sexes
also
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remained mostly the same in
both
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countries.
Overall
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,
while
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in 1980
Australia
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had a bigger total
population
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than
Malaysia
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, the latter caught up a little more in the following years
due to
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its greater
population
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growth
rate
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, even when it dropped slightly in 2002.
Malaysia
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's dropping birth
rate
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also
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did not alter
this
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statistic very greatly, as they already had twice bigger birth
rate
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growth than
Australia
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in the earlier year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia, population, both, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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