The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The table above informs the data regarding
Australia
and
Malaysia
's general
population
in 1980 and 2002. It shows that the
population
from
both
countries increased in the span of two decades, with
slightly
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a slightly
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higher
rate
in
Malaysia
. Interestingly,
Australia
had seen a moderate jump in older
population
above
65-year-old
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65 years old
, a little over
Malaysia
's less than 1% increase.
While
both
countries had a lower birth
rate
in 2002, the annual
population
growth still
shown
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showed
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a rather constant percentage, only budging 0.1% up in
Australia
and 0.3% down in
Malaysia
.
Population
Correct article usage
The population
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rate
for
both
sexes
also
remained mostly the same in
both
countries.
Overall
,
while
in 1980
Australia
had a bigger total
population
than
Malaysia
, the latter caught up a little more in the following years
due to
its greater
population
growth
rate
, even when it dropped slightly in 2002.
Malaysia
's dropping birth
rate
also
did not alter
this
statistic very greatly, as they already had twice bigger birth
rate
growth than
Australia
in the earlier year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia, population, both, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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