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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The visual illustrates the
proces
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process
 of
electrivity
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electricity
 generation in a
hudroelectric
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hydroelectric
 power station. Starting
this
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process
proces
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process
 is from
river
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the river
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 and finish in low-
leve
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level
reservior
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reservoir
Water
come
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comes
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 from
river
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the river
a river
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 in
high-level
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a high-level
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 reservior to
Dam
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the Dam
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 and in
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the days
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days
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day
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intakle
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the intakle
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get
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gets
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 open
however
 at
nights
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night
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get
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gets
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 closed,
this
water
 flow
of
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apply
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generate
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generates
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electricy
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electricity
 in
day
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the day
a day
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also
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at nights
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nights
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night
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this
water
 flow
of pumping
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pumps
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then
arrive
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arrives
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 at
revesible
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the revesible
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 turbines how in
day
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the day
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operate
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operates
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 generator
although
night
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at night
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 is pump
water
 into high-level reservior after that
water
 get to the generator in power station toward powe line in national grid.
befor
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Before
 getting in
generator
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the generator
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 in
day
this
water
come
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comes
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 back to the
last
proces
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process
 and days
this
water
pour
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pours
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in
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into
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 the
low- level
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low-level
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 reservoir. It was the
oroces
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process
 of
hydraroelectric
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hydroelectric
 power station which have been done in
almoust
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almost
 6
level
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levels
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 and the
procec
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process
is change
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is changed
is changing
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 in
day
 and night.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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