In many countries, the consumption of fast food is becoming more and more popular. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend for individuals and for society as a whole.
off course the demand and
consuption
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consumption
of
junk Change preposition
for
food
become more popular and easy to reache
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reach
in
these days Change preposition
apply
due to
many reasons and factors. in this
essay
we will discuss Add a comma
essay,
about
the pros and cons of Remove the preposition
apply
this
trend for both individuals and Correct article usage
the comunity
comunity
as well.
first of all, we Correct your spelling
community
gona
talk about the advantages for Correct your spelling
gonna
persons
and Replace the word
people
sociaty
as well, fast Correct your spelling
society
food
such
as ( KFC, burger king, and macdonaldis
...etc) Correct your spelling
MacDonald is
are
the example of it, it Change the verb form
is
is make
our life easy Wrong verb form
makes
due to
it is safe out time
that we spend it in cooking for a meal at home specialy
for Correct your spelling
specially
especially
those pepole
they work up to late Change the determiner
that pepole
time
so they do not have time
to cook , the children are eating more of this
kind of food
becaese
it has more tasty Correct your spelling
because
flavore
for them so the parents will not force them what they want to eat at home , Correct your spelling
flavour
flavours
flavoured
additionally
it is Add a comma
additionally,
good
source of income for the company as well for the Add an article
a good
sociaty
.
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society
on the other hand
, the
junk Correct article usage
apply
food
not benifite
for our health if you Correct your spelling
benefit
are consume
it most of the Change the verb form
are consuming
time
like 4 or 5 days in
a week. it can lead to health Change preposition
apply
proplem
and diseases Correct your spelling
problems
problem
for
example, heart Add the comma(s)
, for
proplem
, obesity , Correct your spelling
problems
problem
diabetise
and hyperlipidemia. Correct your spelling
diabetes
moreover
it will Add a comma
moreover,
coste
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cost
the
Correct article usage
apply
sociaty
more money they need to spend Correct your spelling
society
it
to Correct pronoun usage
apply
treate
those people, to build more (health Correct your spelling
treat
create
centers
, Change the spelling
centres
fittnes
places, healthy Correct your spelling
fitness
resturants
, more Correct your spelling
restaurants
advertisment
Correct your spelling
advertisements
in
TV or social media) for Change preposition
on
decreased
the consumption of these Change the form of the verb
decreasing
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
food
.
to sum up
, the
fast Correct article usage
apply
food
not
that much bad Add a missing verb
is not
as well as
not that much good for persons
or Replace the word
people
sociaty
in general, Correct your spelling
society
the
people should be aware Correct article usage
apply
what
they are eating and entering in Change preposition
of what
there
Replace the word
their
body
Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
also
, they need to balance there
life and Correct your spelling
their
food
since we are in rapide
changes in these days.Correct your spelling
rapid
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