Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. #people #situation #job

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to having bad situations
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as unsatisfied occupation or low income, there are two points of view:
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some believe it is better to adjust yourself
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any situation, some others prefer to endeavor for development.
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it causes regression and lack of progress. The details about the mentioned issue will be discussed in the following paragraph. In general, the degree of acceptance of horrible conditions
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as a heavy workload or full-time jobs with poor perks is
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will definitely have no consequence other than regret and depression in the long run.
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accepting tough positions does not impose any obligation on capitalists and employers to improve employee job benefits and in a faulty cycle, it worsens the work footing.
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, in 2018 it was reported in International news that almost 60% of people with dead-end jobs were afflicted with depression and seclusion.
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, striving for better conditions not only restores the sense of life in a person
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keeps the hope of progress abiding.
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promotion gradually increases and he faces everyday matters with a more open mind. So it will not suffer from routineness and recession.
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regarding career and financial issues, it leads to greater satisfaction and work/life balance.
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, many
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claim that they were in a hard position in the past and they prefer to
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fought for a
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life.
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the idea that the more contests you do, the more
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you gain.
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it recommended that choose to strive for advancement rather than stagnation and acceptance.
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Clarify your points more effectively by elaborating on your ideas further. For instance, expand on why people believe adapting to bad situations can lead to regression.
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Use diverse vocabulary and expressions to enhance your essay's readability and make your argument more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly presents a single main idea. The introduction does this well, but the body paragraphs could be more focused.
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Improve the logical flow of your sentences by using cohesive devices (e.g., furthermore, however, consequently) more consistently.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, which is essential for a coherent and cohesive piece.
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Both sides of the argument are discussed, showing that you understood the task requirements well.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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