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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2Fc214dd20078195fdbcb53a8468110da9.png&w=1920&q=75

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2Fc214dd20078195fdbcb53a8468110da9.png&w=1920&q=75
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The layouts provide key information about the changes that have taken place in
museum
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the museum
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 from its establishment in 1998 to 2008.
Overall
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 clear from the maps that the museum has undergone substantial redevelopment, with several features either relocated or transformed.
In addition
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, in 1998 plan showed a simple sketch,
whereas
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2008
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the 2008
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 plan experienced a symmetrical design.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1998, the garden
located
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was located
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 at the
cintre
Correct your spelling
centre
 of the museum. It featured
cafe
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a cafe
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lay
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lying
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 above the garden and between
permanent
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the permanent
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 exhibition room,
while
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 the temporary exhibition room, tickets, entrance/exit and shop
on
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were on
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 the opposite
site
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side
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,
additionally
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, the bathrooms and bags and coats area were in the lower right corner. In terms of 2008, all permanent exhibition rooms had become
at
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in
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 the right section and
restaurant
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restaurants
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 were added
on
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in
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 the upper left corner.
Moreover
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, the garden
was become
Change to the active voice
became
has become
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 more attractive with fountains and
cafe
Correct article usage
a cafe
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 sitting area. Bathrooms moved to be side by side with
coffee
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a coffee
the coffee
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 shop.

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