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The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The shots that
been
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have been
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 given to mystery the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade
three
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in three
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 different countries from the
year
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 2004 to 2009 Where Australian trade with
Japan
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 was at 40
billion
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 exported to
Japan
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while
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 just under 40
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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imported in the
year
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 2002 export
is stayed
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stays
stayed
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 the same until the
year
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 2005
while
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 the import stayed to decrease until
it
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they
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 reached 30
billion
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 after the
year
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 2005 the imported from
Canada
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 to
Japan
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 increased significantly to reach all-time high between the period given with over 60
billion
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on the other hand
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 the import to
Canada
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 from
Japan
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 stayed at the same range in terms of China.
They
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Their
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 exported
was
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were
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 the same between 2002 to 2009 with approximately 40
billion
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 imported from China to
Canada
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was fluctuated
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apply
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. It started
the
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2002 with 35
billion
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 it got decreased until it
reach
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reached
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 the valley with just 20
billion
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however
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 after
the
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apply
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2005
it's
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it
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 increased
with
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by
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considerable
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a considerable
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 amount for
the
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apply
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trade it was steady that's been given with 20 and 40
billion
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 for imported and exported respectively
to sum up
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 , the top country that
Canada
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 exported to is
Japan
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while
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 the top country
Canada
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 imported from is China
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, japan, billion, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade surplus
  • trade deficit
  • bilateral trade
  • exports
  • imports
  • economic relationship
  • year-on-year growth
  • trade volume
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnation
  • commodities
  • market forces
  • import/export ratio
  • financial quarter
  • trade barriers
  • tariff
  • free trade agreement
  • economic indicators
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