The diagrams below show the lifecycle of the silkworm and the process for producing silk cloth. Summarise the information in the charts and make comparisons where appropriate.

The diagrams below show the lifecycle of the silkworm and the process for 

producing silk cloth. 

Summarise the information in the charts and make comparisons where 

appropriate.
The two graphs show the lifecycle of the
silkworm
and the process of producing silk. The lifecycle of the
silkworm
begins with a mature moth laying eggs on a mulberry leaf. After 8-10
days
the eggs hatch producing
silkworm
larvae that feed on mulberry leaves. The feeding continues for 30-40
days
after which the
silkworm
larvae spin a cocoon around their bodies.
This
process takes 4-7
days
to complete. After a
further
15
days
, the larvae hatch to form adult moths that reproduce by laying
further
eggs beginning a new cycle. The cocoons created by the larva are carefully selected for the silk-making process. Once selected, the cocoons are boiled in water allowing the thread of the cocoon to be unwound into thread
that is
usually in the range of 250-900 meters in length. The individual threads are
then
twisted together to form a stronger thread and
then
weaved into cloth in preparation for dyeing.
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