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People believe that not all school children have the natural ability to learn a new language. This means is not right to force all school children to study a foreign language. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Learning a new language is not everyone’s
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. Many people suggest that forcing students is wrong, against their natural learning ability, into learning a foreign native system. I strongly disagree with the above proposal and
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 justify my views in the following paragraphs.
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, children are certainly fluent in their mother tongue
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, they are foreign words that can’t be learned from any source other than school.
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, teachers can help the pupils who find these subjects difficult and increase their confidence in developing an understanding of specific vocabulary.
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 a result, their quality can be developed among students over time. In conclusion, even if students don’t have the natural ability to learn an international dialect, it is right for schools to make some foreign
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 compulsory, as it has many benefits
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 helps young people develop new and interesting skills
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Your essay has a clear stance and provides some justification, but to improve, you should include more specific examples and elaborate on your arguments. This will help in making your points stronger and more convincing.
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Work on providing more coherence within paragraphs. Try to ensure that each sentence logically follows from the previous one. This will make your arguments easier to follow for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clearly present and provide a good frame for your essay.
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You present a clear argument and your stance is well-defined.

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