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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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 era of digitalisation,
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 and applications have revolutionised the modes of consuming information.
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 has resulted in a decline in the
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classical
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 industry.
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 evident and beneficial shift. The attractive nature of electronics and their user-friendly interface can be attributed to their rapid integration
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 society. Smartphones make it possible to analyse and update data much faster than
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, which lures the masses to switch their research. It not only makes information more accessible but
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 possesses systems to evaluate the authenticity of data.
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, the minimum time required for any news to reach the people is a day;
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internet
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 it is possible to instantaneously update
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 about current affairs. These attributes of
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 result in their increased popularity. Specialised applications catering to
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 needs of every individual are another factor. Advanced options in avenues
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 monotonous counterparts,
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 the attention of a vast majority of consumers.
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, readily available information and its adaptability in accordance with the user’s need
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 has been profitable to many.
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, various surveys reveal that the applications which are installed with codes to analyse the stock market
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 have increased user satisfaction by giving people statistically accurate data and assisting them in making more profits. These advantages undoubtedly make a strong case against the relevance of
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, in
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, in light of of recent developments, it is not wrong to say that since the introduction of
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 has become redundant, as the former provides ease of operation and user
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satisfaction
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task achievement
To enhance your essay, delve deeper into specific examples that highlight the advantages of the internet over print media. Ensure each main point is supported with well-explained examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to vary your transitional phrases and avoid repetition. This will create a smoother flow between ideas.
task achievement
The essay offers a comprehensive introduction and conclusion, clearly presenting a stance on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is maintained throughout the essay, guiding the reader through the arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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