The bar chart below gives information about the spending habits of people in four countries on consumer goods in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the spending habits of people in four countries on consumer goods in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates how much
money
was spent on different products of citizens in 4 European countries in 2012.
Overall
, the percentage of
expenditure
went
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that went
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into all areas of British people stayed at the highest rate compared with others.
Conversely
, the demand of residents in Belgium and Austria for several types of goods was at the lowest position. The amount of
money
spent on all examined goods
of
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by
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British citizens remained at the peak, with the highest figure was the
expenditure
on cameras and
toys
, at 170 and 167 respectively, followed by the spending in the realms of
toys
, books, cosmetics, games, and outdoor gear which ranged around 160.
By contrast
, the
expenditure
on buying cameras, books, and
toys
of Belgium presidents was
lowest
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the lowest
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, fluctuating only around 145,
while
the amount of
money
went
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that went
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into games, outdoor accessories and cosmetics was at approximately 150. Cameras, which were bought the most by
Austria
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Austrian
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people, stood at 165, followed by the figure for
expenditure
on books and
toys
at around 155.
In addition
,
Austria
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Austrian
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citizens
consumed
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spent
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less
money
on cosmetics, games and outdoor products, just under 150. The figure for the
expenditure
of Spain occupants in all types of products was relatively similar, just about 155 for each field.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, expenditure, toys with synonyms.
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