It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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, it has been said that individuals should get into
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nupital
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knot early in
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. I strongly support
this
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paragraphs
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Firstly
, early marriage gives ample
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amount
of time
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the couple to understand each other before planning to start a family as better understanding and judgement of each other would ultimately lead to
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envrionment
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environment
for the children.
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, one of my
cousin
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got married at the age of 25 and they took 4 years before starting a family which helped them
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more
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stable and loveable atmosphere for the
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, marrying in
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the 20's
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20's
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is more fruitful for
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young couples and society as
whole
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.
Secondly
, young parents in their late
20's
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or early
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can be better involved in their child's
life
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or no medical
problem
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which they may face in their
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life
. Activities like
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exercise
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and playing
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any sports
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parents to be on their toes to encourage their wards towards fitness and
this
can only happen if the parents themselves are physically fit.
Therefore
, involving in martial bliss early in
life
is advantageous for longer run. Concluding my thoughts, marriage is the most beautiful phase of
life
and enjoying that in the initial years of adulthood will lead to more happier and
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life
for people which will lead to
better
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society
overall
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task achievement
Avoid using informal phrases like 'nupital knot'. Use terms like 'marriage' or 'get married'.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread for minor grammatical errors such as 'More oftenly' which should be 'More often'.
task achievement
Provide a stronger conclusion that summarizes your main points more effectively.
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You provide relevant and specific examples.
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You clearly stated your position and supported it with two main points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is structured logically with clear paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and relevant.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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