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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
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The map shows the planned
location
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 for a new school in Canterbury
Town
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.
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, there are two possible sites in different
part
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parts
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 of the
town
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 that are shown on the map. The first
site
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 is located in
countryside
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a countryside
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 area,
in
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on
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 the
outskirt
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outskirts
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 of
housing
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the housing
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 zone of Canterbury
Town
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.
This
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site
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 is on the northeast
from
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of
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 the university and northeast
from
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of
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 the second
site
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.
Tt
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It
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 is
quiet
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quite
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 far from the
town
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 centre and can only be accessed by main roads on the north side of the
site
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 which lead to the next
town
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, Sturry
in
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apply
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5 km with 7,000 people. Because of its rural
location
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,
this
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 area is more quiet and mostly covered with trees. The next possible
location
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 for
school
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the school
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 is located in
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town
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the town
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 centre with no traffic zone. From
this
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location
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, the university is located on the north side of the
site
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. Because of its
location
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, it is easily accessible from the housing area and the
neighboring
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neighbouring
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town
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, Chartham, which is located 7 km from here with
4,500
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a 4,500
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 population.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words location, town, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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