The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The par bar chart provides key information about five sectors industries:
Finance
, Food processing, manufacturing, Tourism, and
oil
, coal, and
gas
over a period of 10 years with expectations for 2029. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that
Finance
was by far the most important
catogary
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category
,
whereas
relatively Manufacturing
is
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was the lowest one.
In addition
, Tourism and
oil
,coal and
gas
have mostly the same pattern over the period.
Furthermore
,
Oil
, coal, and
gas
was
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the highest columns after
Finance
over the period shown.
According to
what is shown,
Finance
rose dramatically to a peak of 36% and 41%
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between 2019 and 2029, respectively.
By contrast
, Manufacturing in 2029 will be negligible at nearly 5%.
Oil
, coal and
gas
in 2019 overtook Tourism, Manufacturing, and Food processing reaching
at
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32%.
Moreover
, Food processing in 2029 will
decreasce
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decrease
to
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10%
percent
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and goes back to how it was in 2009.
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