The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The par bar chart provides key information about five sectors industries:

Finance

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, Food processing, manufacturing, Tourism, and

oil

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, coal, and

gas

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over a period of 10 years with expectations for 2029. The units are measured in percentages.

Overall

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, it is clear from the graph that

Finance

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was by far the most important

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category

whereas

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relatively Manufacturing

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was the lowest one.

In addition

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, Tourism and

oil

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,coal and

gas

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have mostly the same pattern over the period.

Furthermore

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Oil

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, coal, and

gas

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was

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the highest columns after

Finance

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over the period shown.

According to

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what is shown,

Finance

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rose dramatically to a peak of 36% and 41%

percent

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between 2019 and 2029, respectively.

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, Manufacturing in 2029 will be negligible at nearly 5%.

Oil

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, coal and

gas

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in 2019 overtook Tourism, Manufacturing, and Food processing reaching

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32%.

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, Food processing in 2029 will

decreasce

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decrease

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10%

percent

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and goes back to how it was in 2009.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words finance, oil, gas with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

157 words

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