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Some people believe that after the child begins his/her schooling their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #child #teachers #influence #parents
Nowadays,
this
 topic is always disputable that after starting kindergarten
children
have
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 more inspired by their teacher rather than guardians.I
have
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completely agree with
this
 statement and write some words related to
this
 belief. On the one side,there are myriad reasons that infants have been motivated by
teachers
 after
start
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 education as they have been spending
huge
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 amount of time in school in
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contrast
 to home.
For
instance
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teachers
 can encourage
children
 by providing various tasks and
keep
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engaging them in numerous cognitive skills activities
thus
,they would get more inspiration from their
teachers
. On the other side,parents have more work pressure and deadlines to complete
as a result
 they don't have enough spare time for their kids.
Moreover
,
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 era there
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the
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ratio of working women as
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 to past years and it
would be
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negative
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a negative
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impacts
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impact
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 on
upbringing
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the upbringing
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 of
child
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children
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.
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 there are
enhanced
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an enhanced
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 number of child care
home
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 for foster and care of
children
 whose parents are working.
To sum up
this
,I would like to stop my pen to say that
children
 should
have
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 encouraged by both parents and
teachers
.Both are equally responsible for their inspiration even after their child starts schooling.
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